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General writing discussion.
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Well, the activity in the thread had died to the point that there was only one or two posts in there a day, and days were going past where there was no response at all. Eventually, it just... wasn't worth the effort.
"How?" she asked neutrally.
"How?"
"How do you feel, then?" Natalie looked sidewards at him, watching for any traces of deceit.
"How about when you...?"
^Looks pretty good so far. I didn't see any structure issues and the dialogue flows naturally, I think. Have some more?
Anyway, it does, but... I'm not sure how to fix that.
I have tried to establish Natalie, previously, as someone who likes to remain perfectly still when she can. It's her job- she hunts things like the thing that got Robbie, so she likes to, well, remain motionless, because habits breed.
The scene just before this one involved another character (Natalie's longtime partner) yelling at Robbie for being unempathetic towards the girl theyre protecting from a thing that's hunting her- he told her to stop whimpering.
Yeah, I'm not sure I could pull it off either.