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General writing discussion.
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I can't think of any weaknesses for him
The tier part is just me lining him up on the Tier scale for Cryscon. Helps me visualize his power better. Tier 4 just means very strong, possible for a mortal to think of as a demigod. I figure a powerful demon would belong under this
So, any help with weaknesses? This is the profile I have of him so far:
Name: Umbreal
Species: Light Demon
Tier 4
Height: 8'7"
Weight: 372 Lbs
Description: Varies. His true form is a tall, slenderish demon with a long serrated tail. His arms and legs are humanesque in design, but long, thin, and gangly. The fingers have serrated backsides and the feet resemble that of a raptors. He has black skin with white tribal markings on it, cold blue eyes, and a pair of horns that resemble stag antlers (and are about the size of a large pair). He has no wings, using his powers to fly instead
His human form is a 6'3" slim caucasian male with blonde hair drawn back in a pony tail. He wears a business suit when like this. His eyes remain the same cold blue. His face is a little feminine in this form, making him a little ambiguous at first glance
Powers: Barrier creation by manipulating light (don't ask how light creates a solid barrier it just does). Think of a green lantern but with no need to recharge. Also can transmit images over a distance with this light manipulation
Personality: Fairly calm and polite, hard to irk. This can be attributed to him cutting loose on occasion and slaughtering anything he lays his eyes on. Can get angered if you harm those he sees as friends - which can vary from a typical fellow demon to something as unexpected as an extremely pious and holy priest
Likes: Strength of any kind. Raw physical strength, high intelligence, large amounts of bravery, strength of character... He's just as likely to approve of Mother Teresa as he is Ghengis Khan due to them showing different kinds of strength
Dislikes: Cowardice. Also rabbits for some unknown reason
Eventually, Waltzy. It'll get there.
> two weeks later
:'D
I think it's alright. I like your descriptions of what the characters are feeling. Because of the all female cast so far, I'm getting confused by all the use of pronouns.
I hope I remember to read the second chapter when I have time.
for some reason, the phrase That Goddamn Manslut makes me giggle.
I like the dialogue a lot. But so far, this is still just a tea and sob fic for me.
I'll read the third chapter in time.
The "His Bo Staff" sentence is incomplete.
Not a bad fan fic. Though wow, I am so out of loop with the X-Men mythos.
And Cyclops is the new Magneto? And Wolverine leads the institute?
...What?
I liked how metaphorical Matthew's steel legs were. Especially the line "I never had legs to begin with."
Even if Luce was a haughty bastard in the beginning of the story, I couldn't help but feel sorry for the brat. Though I'd say Judith's attitude was justified.
Good story, MST3Kluv
This too, though it's barely starting out.