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  • Has friends besides tanks now
    Wouldn't be too late for you to go, would it? >.>



    Just trying to figure out what to do--never mind, I might actually be able to get in soon. Phew.
  • I guess technically no it wouldn't be too late to go, and honestly if it were practical I wouldn't mind going there just for Saturday or something, but I don't have a car and even if I did I definitely am not nearly confident enough about driving to try going to Boston, and I don't want to ask my mom or dad to bring me there on such short notice, since that doesn't seem very nice to do. 


    Though I know you probably didn't mean that seriously anyway. 

  • Creature - Florida Dragon Turtle Human

    I'm going to a convention in the last weekend of April.


     


    I can cosplay as Shinji...[awesomeface.jpg]

  • Creature - Florida Dragon Turtle Human

    Oh yeah, in case I haven't already mentioned it, there's a convention at Quinnipiac University in the weekend of April 28-29.  It's called Quinni-con.

  • I have to comp with the annual Jesus Christ Superstar in the background. Needs to get laptop replacement asap.


    Had sporting afternoon in park, which mostly ended in people splattering eggs on each other's noggins. Also, turns out I'm pretty good at hanging from my arms for a long time.

  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    TOR finally finished downloading last night.

  • edited 2012-04-06 17:18:28
    One foot in front of the other, every day.

    So, Warhammer Fantasy is a really good game, right? 


    And one of its strongest elements is the lore -- it's a kind of German Renaissance meets vampires, black magic Vikings, Arthurian knights, soccer mob orcs and more. A ridiculous, tongue-in-cheek mashup of historical and fantasy elements that nonetheless can evoke narrative with a more serious tone. 


    So I thought, after over ten years of avoiding it, I mean read a book of it. You know, like a novel.


    Oh boy. 


    I was prepared for questionable writing -- what I wasn't prepared for is something reminiscent of Eragon. Lemme give you a few excerpts. 



    With a groan, the warrior staggered back, his gloved hand clutching at the crimson seeping from his belly. The soldier looked in disgust at the thing that had dealt him his wound, the crimson gleaming from its dark, rust-pitted blade. His enemy did not seem to notice in the slightest that it had harmed its opponent. That the man yet lived seemed to be its only observation, indeed, if the two pasty orbs that stared emptily from the mouldering ruin of its face were capable of observing anything.


    The undead thing took a shambling step towards the soldier, its decayed arm raising its rusted sword once more.



    Emphasis mine. 


    So let's see what we've got here. 



    • Repetition of an adjective. There's nothing wrong with using the word "blood", or even just not mentioning it. Tell us that the mortal combatant is wounded and you can more or less leave it at that. 

    • "Orbs". That is all.

    • We don't need to be told the sword is rusted twice. That fact was established in the initial description, so it sticks in our minds. 

    • "its decayed arm raising its rusted sword" is one of those "the quick brown fox jumped over the lazy dog" sentences. It's clunky and we already know this information. "It raised its sword" would be perfectly fine.


    I was never expecting greatness from something that would essentially be glorified fanfic, but nor did I expect The Eye Of Argon. Were I a publisher, I would already be disinterested in this book. And yet, it got published. 



    The warrior gritted his teeth against the pain surging from the cut this grave-cheating horror had inflicted upon him, struggling to lift his shield to intercept the zombie’s attack. The weight of the shield seemed to have increased and he realised that slow as the zombie’s thrust was, his own reactions were slower still.



    This bit actually starts off a little promising. "The warrior gritted his teeth" is short, sharp and expressive -- showing, not telling. But then the author had to elaborate. Mind, "grave-cheating" is a pretty good phrase, but it sounds as though it belongs in dialogue rather than narration. 


    The other thing here is the introduction of the term "zombie", which doesn't make sense. For one thing, zombies are stupidly average adversaries in pop culture media as a whole. In Warhammer, they're very, very inferior to the average soldier of other forces. What kind of dunce gets wounded by a zombie while well-armed? It makes no external or internal sense, not that the phrase "zombie" inspires any interest or dread to begin with. 


    It would have been much more interesting if it were never quite named, like some kind of Frankenstein construct. 


    So, for shits and giggles, I'll try my hand at a revision of the above quoted sections. 



    The man staggered back, clutching his freshly-earned wound. Even now, on the verge of death, he couldn't shake the stench of his assailant. Or was that the smell of his own death? He would ask the pale eyed man, the one who had been kind enough to let his bad blood. The pale eyed man hurt him, but the bad blood was leaving and soon everything would be fine. If anything happened to the wounded man, the pale eyed man would make it better, undo it. It didn't matter how bad the injury was -- the pale eyed man could make anyone stand up again.


    The wounded man fell to his injuries, dead.


    Then he stood up, and his eyes were pale. 



    That was a little primitive, but it's also much more interesting. It's perspective, thoughts, psychology, interpretation. The things the written word does so well. A film or game says "the man fought the zombie, and then the man died", and those mediums are much better at it. Narrative books are almost by definition internalised interpretations of events a character undergoes, even if it isn't written from a first-person perspective. A man fighting a zombie tells us nothing -- a man fighting something that could be interpreted as a zombie, losing his sense of perspective in the process, tells us about horror. His mind dies before his body does, which hints at the kind of mental trauma he's experienced. 


    Now the "zombie" isn't a zombie -- it's an embodiment of death and can be interpreted in various ways. Now the reader isn't just reading literal events, but can own their own interpretation of the narration. 

  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    > two and a half pages

  • I'm a damn twisted person

    Shot bow today. Made some decent progress in that the groupings are tighter and I hit the target 4 times . I can't say there is a fuck yeah sort of enjoyment for it, but there is a bit of quiet satisfaction for small improvements.


     


    And I don't like the female Jedi Consular's VA less than the female Jedi Knight's VA. Bluh.

  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    I should go start up a Jedi Consular anyway. What world do you and Forzare play on now?

  • I'm a damn twisted person

    The Razor server. It's on the North American drop down list, so I don't know if that will be a problem for you though.

  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    Okay. I'ma go play then.

  • I clench my fists and yell "anime" towards an uncaring, absent God, and swear solemnly to press my thumbs into Chocolate America's eyeballs until he is blinded, to directly emasculate sporting figures, to beat the shit out of tumblr users with baseball bats, and to quietly appreciate what Waylon Smithers being gay means to me.

    One of my friends is a libertarian who hates the gold standard and wants the government to outlaw abortion and gay marriage 

  • edited 2012-04-06 18:16:51
    Till shade is gone, till water is gone, into the Shadow with teeth bared, screaming defiance with the last breath, to spit in Sightblinder’s eye on the last Day.
    ^^ I'd log in my Knight and go hang out on Tython with you, but I'm about to watch War Horse with my family.



    What's your character's name? If some dude with a bunch of armor and an orange lightsaber named Tarwin shows up and waves at you in a couple hours, that's me.



    Unless an NA server turns out to be too laggy for you to play on. Or unless you end up hating it.
  • Has friends besides tanks now
    Fucking hell, Anime Boston is way too big to be wandering alone.
  • You can change. You can.

    Man, can't believe I'm actually reading a recap and enjoying it


    Honestly, I think Starman might be amongst my favourite superhero books right now.

  • MORONS! I'VE GOT MORONS ON MY PAYROLL!

    How did 'The cake is a lie' become the prime meme from Portal?


    'Look at me still talking when there's science to do.' would have been much better and a great way to end a conversation.

  • You can change. You can.

    Almost any other line from Portal is more quotable than "The cake is a lie" to be honest.

  • Has friends besides tanks now
    Saw Kanako Ito live! :D
  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    What's your character's name? If some dude with a bunch of armor and an orange lightsaber named Tarwin shows up and waves at you in a couple hours, that's me.



    well i was called out to go finish this fucking garden shed before I could even play

  • Till shade is gone, till water is gone, into the Shadow with teeth bared, screaming defiance with the last breath, to spit in Sightblinder’s eye on the last Day.
    ah
  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    stupid goddamned garden shed


    i hate it so much


    so


    much

  • a little muffled

    "The cake is a lie" is almost a meme in-game though.

  • MORONS! I'VE GOT MORONS ON MY PAYROLL!

    It's more just foreshadowing that shit has gotten fucked up, yo.

  • a little muffled

    I know. But, I mean, the phrase is repeated in-game and hidden in all these places, it's no surprise people would start repeating it in real life.

  • If you must eat a phoenix, boil it, do not roast it. This only encourages their mischievous habits.

    Noximillian on The Razor, I am. Nova was taken already, dammit.

  • You can change. You can.

    I know. But, I mean, the phrase is repeated in-game and hidden in all these places, it's no surprise people would start repeating it in real life.



    I just remember one instance of it...?


    Granted, it's hilarious because it sounds like such an anti-climax, at least to me. Also, who writes that with their blood? not "This is a trap, she's gonna kill you" the guy simply decided to express his indignation about the fact that there is no cake. Who cares about being locked up forever. He wanted cake, goddamnit.

  • Definitely not gay.

    ^ Well, the guy is insane.

  • MORONS! I'VE GOT MORONS ON MY PAYROLL!

    ^^Yeah, the game is really good at mixing horror and comedy.


    You know, every time people go for horror-comedy it's usually over-the-top stuff like Evil Dead 2 or Shaun of the Dead or the later Nightmare on Elm Street films. I'm trying to remember if there are any prominent horror films where the wit is more dry.

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