I'm not sure if I want help writing my visual novel script

All Nines

I'm at seventeen pages, and I've just now come up to the first branch. And I've only introduced five of twenty main characters . . .

I don't think this is the sort of thing I could ever hope to finish on my own, but I don't want it to go to waste because I think it has the potential to not be the biggest piece of shit I've written.

I was wondering if I should ask for help writing it, or even just feedback. But I'm not sure who would be okay with that since it gets rather . . . fetishistic at points, and it would be a real project. Plus, it's kind of annoying in that almost tries to be realistic but has a few instances where it fails hard at that. And I'm not even sure I want someone else seeing my ideas before they come to fruition in the first place and am still sorta clinging onto that sense of "it's my creation, I want absolute power over it" in the back of my head. Never mind that visual novels, even besides the art, are not one-man projects . . .

Blarglefargle.

Nova

>_>

<_<

What type of fetishes? You'll need to answer that first

MillerCross

do it faggot. Show someone your script and see how they react. Of course, first you ask if they are interested in the material, yadda yadda.

All Nines

@ Cygan Well, first of all: it's an eroge. That by itself will tell you something that you should know.

Second, fetishes: [Continually-occurring student-on-teacher that, for the sake of plot convenience, doesn't get reported even though it involves countless studens, watersports, catgirl, and maybe others I can't think of or haven't added. And it's primarily yuri.]

@Juan_Carlos Maybe once I have more of it written. And I should touch up the opening scenes a bit first, just to make sure everything looks good.

Nova

oh noes

Most of them are cool, but some of them would... not be my thing.

GLORIOUSLeader

I forget what watersports is. 

DYRE

Stuff involving peeing.

All Nines

It's a fancy term for a urination fetish.

Ninja'd.

GLORIOUSLeader

Isn't that just a golden shower?

Bob

My suggestion (for what it's worth); get most of the main details out / on paper / whatever first, then ask for feedback. If you find like-minded people, ask them if they'd be interested in helping you with it, assuming you want the help.

All Nines

I have a character sheet right now, and it's got most of the important things concerning each character, instead of just listing names and basic roles. I haven't really planned out the plots in detail so much yet. And it would take a while because there are six playable characters, each with their own share of paths.

And I need to get a feel for the tone of it through writing.

Bob

So, any chance you'll post it / PM it to someone if they express interest?

All Nines

I don't think I'm ready to divulge anything at the moment, but I'll probably necro this thread when I want some other people's thoughts and have done some fine-tuning.

Forzare

Re: fetishes:

You had me right up until the peeing.  :<

DYRE

You had me starting from the peeing.

Not sure if should strikethrough.

Chagen

I would suggest fetishes to add, but everyone knows what I would say first, so nevermind.

Anyway, is the sex integral to the plot? Or is is just there? Basically, could it be possible to release a clean version and have the plot still make sense?

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"But I'm not sure who would be okay with that since it gets rather . . . fetishistic at points, and it would be a real project. Plus, it's kind of annoying in that almost tries to be realistic but has a few instances where it fails hard at that."

Blackmoon.

Landstander.

AHR.

Bob

Bob.